tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33208539.post6801402383995891504..comments2023-10-21T13:37:10.839+05:30Comments on amudhan.com: A Story You May Not Like - Part IIAmudhanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06517557838074500370noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33208539.post-89807169040919539252010-06-23T20:25:04.312+05:302010-06-23T20:25:04.312+05:30Smart piece of writing!! Should try ur hand at scr...Smart piece of writing!! Should try ur hand at script writing, after seeing raavan i feel we need lot of script writers!!!Natraj Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08528001734193022745noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33208539.post-10294516784781020272010-06-10T12:09:36.437+05:302010-06-10T12:09:36.437+05:30@Sindu:
Thanks a lot for your comment and I am re...@Sindu:<br /><br />Thanks a lot for your comment and I am really glad that at least two people liked this...<br /><br />I posted the first post at 9 PM on 31st May (as May had only 2 posts and I wanted it to have at least 3). I intimated everyone on June 1st only. So, effectively, these posts were just one day apart ;)<br /><br />Actually, I had the title (and the spoiler) to arouse interest and it is sad that it became true :(Amudhanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06517557838074500370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33208539.post-6660931189138424012010-06-10T09:21:19.540+05:302010-06-10T09:21:19.540+05:30As the above comments have already discussed the f...As the above comments have already discussed the few shortcomings that did exist, I just wish to say that the attempt was overall, fantastic. <br /><br />1. The spoiler at the beginning was indeed a real stimulant of interest.<br />2. The plot, though simple, has been well conceived to suppress the surrpise element till the end.<br />3. I really did think in the middle that Aravind was going to die by a collision with Saravanan's bus. I am sure many would have gotten that thought. Yet, I actually caught myself wishing that these characters would somehow live n I feel that is the true success of a story - getting the readers to feel for your characters. I indeed did heave a sigh of relief on seeing the end.<br /><br />On a different note, though when I read the story, I had both the parts on screen, I see that you had published them two days apart. I think this might have reduced the intensity of involvement with those who read these two with an interval.<br /><br />Also, may I ask why you have titled the story as "A story you might not like"? Was it another strategy to arouse interest levels or you really felt that way?Sindujahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10270647713638071705noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33208539.post-68018078840436759012010-06-04T13:44:37.781+05:302010-06-04T13:44:37.781+05:30@Appa:
Thanks dad for leaving a comment :)
That s...@Appa:<br />Thanks dad for leaving a comment :)<br /><br />That sentence was purposefully made obscure to be confusing but still make sense later [but I think it failed to make sense ;)...]<br /><br />Also, the 'how can he meet someone who does not exist in his world' was also intended to be confusing... but it remained confusing and failed to make sense by the end...<br /><br />If I had mentioned <b>recipient</b>, it would have given away the thrill (but would have made the climax understandable) and 'I should have died not you' might not have been effective....<br /><br />I am happy that you liked this. I completely agree that this story could have been given a better climax and end...Amudhanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06517557838074500370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33208539.post-39086370938128612612010-06-04T12:43:05.437+05:302010-06-04T12:43:05.437+05:30A good story. But one sentence is not clear.The se...A good story. But one sentence is not clear.The sentence, "<br />Aravind's sms became a lie and he never met him after that in his life..."<br />contains three pronouns.It is a little confusing as to which pronoun refers to whom.Better change it to ,"Aravind's sms became a lie and he never met the <i>recipient</i>.<br />or better still ,","Aravind's sms became a lie <b>because</b> he never met the <i>recipient</i> after that in his life.It contains a clue.Other changes may also be made to make it more interesting.Anyway I liked it(after your explanation for the previous comment).Gunasekaranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08572525058235266823noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33208539.post-32176448886257946382010-06-03T14:50:09.423+05:302010-06-03T14:50:09.423+05:30If you had noted, Aravind always types the number ...If you had noted, Aravind always types the number for calling/messaging... He does not go to contacts as it is his habit...<br /><br />When he sends the sms to Saravanan that he has reached home and they would meet the next day, he types the wrong number and sends it... that is why his sms becomes a lie as he has sent the sms to a non-existing number...<br /><br />Though a sudden brake happened in both of their lives, nothing happened to them...<br /><br />So after some days, they are playing Counter Strike game and the scene continues where Aravind has been killed by the computer... They want to invite another friend and Aravind again types the wrong number...<br /><br />That was intended to be a clue that Aravind sometimes does mistake in typing/dialing the numbers (and that the sms he had sent to Saravanan was actually sent to a wrong number)...<br /><br />Kanna kattudha? ;)Amudhanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06517557838074500370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-33208539.post-22248882168597168112010-06-03T13:53:55.676+05:302010-06-03T13:53:55.676+05:30Couldn't get the climax.Couldn't get the climax.Dobby Severus Salazarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02716356627351003762noreply@blogger.com