Wednesday, February 10, 2010

Short Story - Inspired by true incidents

5) I would love to say something, but all I could do is to grin uncomfortably and leave the place with big strides

4) She smiles at me every time when it happens

3) I say 'damn' involuntarily and she could definitely hear it

2) This has been happening a lot of times in the past one week

1) I go to my old place accidentally forgetting about the change of my place in my office

0) Please read the points in order from 1 to 5.

18 comments:

Sindu said...

:D :D ahhemmmmmmmmmmmm

Jency said...

accidentally??? typo nu nenaikiren, should have been intentionally :P

amudhan said...

@Sindu,Jency:
The blog is the result of what my colleague told me. He [I have to mention that it is a he :)] said, "bull shit man... I keep forgetting about our shift in place and go to our old place... and say 'damn'... and the GUY there gives me a confused look always"

I just gave a romantic build-up to it, at least I tried to :)

Prabakar said...

well well.... well done... :-) build up thala keezhaa irukku....

Jency said...

he he heee, He-ya? Amudhan neenga G nu enakku theriyadhu LOL, btw its legal and i fully support your cause....


Serious comment: different style of story telling, nice try....keep it up!

amudhan said...

@Praba:
:) thanks

@Jency:
It took me some 3 to 5 minutes to understand what you meant... nalla payyannu oru justification kuduththaa, indha kali ulagathula adhayum vachu naaradichuduraangale :(

Have you seen Parle G advertisement? G for Genius, G for Gold Winner, G for Good boy, G for Great, G for Godly, G for Gunasekaran, and G for respect... :)

Serious reply: Thanks :)

Sathyan said...

* .. kind this in story big good a for try a give can you ... story short written '&llew'

* read from last word
& read from the last letter :) :)

amudhan said...

@Sathyan anna:
anna... mudiyala :) engaiyoo pooiteenga... :)

I thought about it na... but since it was based on a very short incident, I wrote like that... I will try to think of a good big story in this kind... Or you can also help me if you have any idea and I will mention co-authored by Sathyan :)

Thanks a lot for leaving a comment for my blog na... it does mean a lot!

Sindu said...

Wow.. it was a fictious story?? Somehow, though not adorned with linguistic style, it had so much of sincere depth to it that I completely thought it was 'inspired' by true incidents...lol, you are really getting good at this..!! :) 5 stars!

amudhan said...

@Sinduja:
I am completely flattered... :) [and I wish that the 5 star is not for a scale of 10 or 100 starts :)]Again, it is not completely fictitious... I am NOT that good a writer... I just gave a 'kutti' buildup to a small incident... thanks once again...

Gawaskar said...

catchy blog:)
but i remember in some book reverse reading the same lines ..
In the same line i understand..
the thought popped up will be the same for different creative peoples.

amudhan said...

@Gawas:
Thanks Gawas... Actually, what I intended was to have two different story...

If we read from 5 to 1, it would be a romantic story, 'A guy goes to tell something (may be proposing) to the girl, but he couldn't; so, he leaves the place embarrassed. The girl smiles at him (as she knows about him) and he says 'damn' involuntarily and goes to his old place forgetting about the shift in his place'.

If read from 1 to 5, it would simply be an incident, 'A guy forgets about his shift in the place and goes to his old place often and says 'damn'. The girl over there smiles. He can say something (apologizing), but he feels embarrassed and leaves'

Why I am telling this now is, I asked my friend whether he noticed what I tried. He said "NO". I understood that I was a BIG flop and wanted to use this opportunity to tell what I had in my mind ;)

Sindu said...

Hey!! I never thoight of it that way. This is getting even better... very nice!! Yes, it does seem like two different perceptions on reading by changing the order. Good thing you mentioned. If you had come up with it urself, way to go..!

amudhan said...

@Sindu:
Thanks Sindu... It wont be a lie if I say that I had come up with it by myself :)

In fact, I thought of explaining about this in the blog itself... but then, I wanted to have it as small as possible.

Gawaskar said...

@amudhan
the two stories in both order are self explanatory :)

amudhan said...

@Gawas:
Thanks Gawas... that is encouraging... :)

vijay said...

very good story amu.. especially the shortness and multi angle you have provided is great!!

amudhan said...

@Vijay:
(This is for others to know): You are my guru... :) Thanks machan...